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• deathkitty

  Nice idea, and some good animation, but it feels like an animation test rather than a short film. I think it would have worked a little better if at the end, before she flies down the hill, you spent more time building up the ending. By that I mean while she is off screen we hear her preparing to go for her joy ride. We would hear noises and wonder what was going on, then shortly after we would get our answer. At the moment I think the punch line is a bit to fast which makes it a bit confusing.
  If you think this is a good suggestion you probably have time to re-edit it and enter it again before the competition is over.
  I hope you found my comments useful.

  May 2, 2008

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• sarah

  great!

  May 9, 2008

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• moog

  nice film - love the art style,
  I'd agree with deathkitty, the punch line IS a bit fast - but then again, you can see it coming, so it may not be a problem.
  
  good work :)

  May 28, 2008

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• I thought it was quite good for the type of film that it is. I also loved the originality - artistic styling wise it was lovely animation - nice sound as well. It was cute! It may not have been the most profound- perhaps a bit too long in the beginning, but it made me laugh out loud! Kudos to you for the effort, talent, and the spreading of smiles!

  June 2, 2008

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